Less flashback, more story.
Can I have more background here?
I have too much grading to do to write.
I’m working on my thesis.
Party! My house! Tonight!
Early morning writing really interferes with my late night binge drinking.
Your story really reminds me of (insert writer here that commenter thinks will impress others with their reading prowess)
You approach your center of gravity, but then you back away.
More emotion.
More dialogue.
Less exposition.
Where is your story?
Style isn’t everything.
It’s like I wanted more and less at the same time.
Dude, that sucked.
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Ah, the memories…..misty-water colored memories….
